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Many years ago, I wrote a short chapter in which a character was forced into a terrifying, dangerous situation, and I demonstrated her anxiety by having the narration ramble and bounce around a lot, to invoke a feeling of confusion and disorientation in the reader.
My beta reader, instead of recognizing this as a stylistic choice, informed me the narration was disjointed and grammatically incorrect and told me to fix it.
Anyway, I was looking to see if anyone had interesting commentary on the latest Berserk chapter, and instead I found someone complaining about how disjointed it is. Yes! It's disjointed! That's the point! She's brainwashed and has her memories suppressed! She's being kept locked up and separated from the real world, she has no idea what's going on, she doesn't even know how much time is passing! The feelings of disorientation are THE POINT!
My beta reader, instead of recognizing this as a stylistic choice, informed me the narration was disjointed and grammatically incorrect and told me to fix it.
Anyway, I was looking to see if anyone had interesting commentary on the latest Berserk chapter, and instead I found someone complaining about how disjointed it is. Yes! It's disjointed! That's the point! She's brainwashed and has her memories suppressed! She's being kept locked up and separated from the real world, she has no idea what's going on, she doesn't even know how much time is passing! The feelings of disorientation are THE POINT!
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